So, like all of us regularly do, I get my fair share of 'junk' or unwanted mail.

I sometimes reply back, just to make the sender embarrassed and possibly enlightened on what he or she is doing wrong.

So, this is one such mail I received:

Mail 1 - Original, 'spammy kinda' mail

---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Sameedavis Consulting India <consulting@sameedavis.com>
Date: Tue, Jun 19, 2012 at 5:17 PM
Subject: Sameedavis Consulting, India : Profile appended for perusal
To: alok@rodinhood.com


Dear Alok!

I am forwarding our updated profile for your kind perusal. If there can be a synergy between the two organizations, we would be privileged to associate.

SDC Indiaafter being in the L&D Practice for a decade, went for a complete make-over; its been re-engineered and restructured over the last one year. At present, we are based out of Mumbai with associate offices in Hyderabad and Chennai. We would be delighted to discuss regarding how we could be of mutual support and leverage, and as well, present our value proposition.

To introduce....

Sameedavis Consulting, India is a Management Consulting Firm and a leading advisor on business strategy, business transformation and growth. Founded in 2008, SDC India seeks to be the agents of change—for our clients, our people, and society overall. We partner with clients from the private, public, and not-for-profit sectors in all regions to identify their highest-value opportunities, address their most critical challenges, and transform their enterprises.

Sameedavis’ customized approach combines deep insight into the dynamics of companies and markets with close collaboration at all levels of the client organization. This ensures that our clients achieve sustainable competitive advantage, build more capable organizations, and secure lasting results.

At Sameedavis, we know from the inside how to build growth strategies that deliver the right results. We believe we will be successful if our clients are successful.

As the Partner of choice to transform business and society, SDC India does not believe in standard industry answers. We know that custom solutions yield the greatest competitive advantage and value for our clients. We ground each solution in how our client’s organization actually works and in the client’s unique position in the marketplace.

Our goal as consultants is to engage in successful actions that result in people or organisations managing themselves differently.

We help our clients to achieve outstanding performance by delivering relevant, proven and effective services, rooted in the skills of our people and tested through real-world experience.In short, at Sameedavis we help organizations to be great

In order to understand how we could make this together and present our value proposition, we solicit your convenient time, day and place for a one-to-one conversationPersonal meeting is always recommended but if it is not happening due to any reason, a Skype conference or even a tele-con should be good for a preliminary discussion. We await your confirmation.

The Independent-Yet-Connected [IYC] Entities of SDC India is:

  • Business & Strategy Consulting [SDC Leverage ]
  • Learning Empowerment & Talent Transformation [SDC Learn]
  • Senior Executive Search & Recruitment [SDC Lead]

Looking forward to have a happening conversation with you...

Joyful regards

Samuel Talari

Director: Client Acquisition

Sameedavis Consulting, India

Mumbai | Hyderabad | Chennai

M: +91 865-546-1280 Skype ID: joyfulregards

joyfulregards@gmail.com | www.sameedavis.com

Mail 2 - This was my reply

 ---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Alok from Rodinhood.com <alok@rodinhood.com>
Date: Tue, Jun 19, 2012 at 5:55 PM
Subject: Re: Sameedavis Consulting, India : Profile appended for perusal
To: Sameedavis Consulting India <consulting@sameedavis.com>


this is such a poorly drafted and presented mail, I would shudder at thinking of getting advise from you on 'business strategy'

the mail is too verbose
 
it's in ITALICS!!
 
It has underlining?!! 
 
This message sounds like u run some MBA program - Our goal as consultants is to engage in successful actions that result in people or organisations managing themselves differently.
 
why have you attached stuff???
 
Sorry. I give up.

 

********

Now, let me tell you - most of the time, I get a mail saying 'get lost / screw you / you are so rude' or no mail at all.

That tells me that the recipient IS NOT AN ENTREPRENEUR - Someone unwilling to take feedback, no matter how rudely presented.

Mail 3 - This is what AN ENTREPRENEUR WROTE BACK


---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Sameedavis Consulting India <consulting@sameedavis.com>
Date: Tue, Jun 19, 2012 at 6:06 PM
Subject: I like the feedback
To: "Alok from Rodinhood.com" <alok@rodinhood.com>

I like the feedback. I don’t give up.

Regards

Sam

Mail 4 - I got TURNED ON

From: Alok Kejriwal [mailto:alok@games2win.com]
Sent: 19 June 2012 20:49
To: Sameedavis Consulting India
Subject: Re: Thanks a ton!

and i am so so motivated by your POSITIVENESS, I will redraft your mail and send u

Wishing you the best,

Alok Kejriwal

Mail 5 - The 'Turned on' feeling was reciprocated!

On Tue, Jun 19, 2012 at 7:26 PM, Sameedavis Consulting India

a href="mailto:consulting@sameedavis.com" target="_blank">consulting@sameedavis.com> wrote:

Hey Alok! You don’t know what you did to me. You just unlocked the w(s)inner in me and am rocking now. Thanks a ton, buddy.

Cheers, Samee

 

Mail 6 - I reverted with the promised draft:

 

---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Alok Kejriwal <alok@games2win.com>
Date: Mon, Jun 25, 2012 at 2:55 PM
Subject: Re: Thanks a ton!
To: Sameedavis Consulting India <consulting@sameedavis.com>

Start of draft*******

Hi, I hope you are well. 

I just want to take a minute or so of your precious time.
 
I am the Director of Client Acquisition of Sameedavis Consulting - a unique boutique outfit that challenges clients about their business!
 
Our effort is to fire a process of change in organisations, starting with the way the management think!
 
Now, if you are thinking, 'Oh, here comes another Consultant', I can understand your apprehension, but would beg just a few minutes to prove that we are worth your time.
 
Please allow me a small meet and greet with you.
 
Would Friday, the 29 of June say 11am or 12/2/3/4 pm be convenient to meet?
 
I will take no more than 19 minutes of your time and one cup of coffee!
 
Warmly,
 
Samuel.

end of draft**********
 

Mail 7 - acknowledgment and a new beginning!

--------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Samuel Talari <samuelt@sameedavis.com>
Date: Mon, Jun 25, 2012 at 3:17 PM
Subject: Thanks from my heart, truly !
To: Alok Kejriwal <alok@games2win.com>

Thanks Alok.

Excellent draft. Being bred in the conventional style of writing, I would have never thought these lines, any time.

I don’t know you. I don’t need to see you also. But, I am clear that I met you at the right time and you’re very important in my life. 

I will keep sharing with you as I go forward in my life. 

I shall remember this day, every day. 

Wishing you all the best 

Warm regards, 

Samee

******* 

Closing remark : Neither Samee or I may have gotten the draft right. No one knows if Samee will get any business. Maybe his first draft was better?!

But that's not the point of this blog post.

What I found in Samee was utter humility and receptiveness - the sign of a GREAT entrepreneur!

What we did understand is that as entrepreneurs, we are able to accept mistakes, work with suggestions and be OPEN TO CHANGE

7 Cheers to Samee and to SameeDavis Consulting India!!!!

*****

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wow. and my heart sank when i saw the beginning of an email thread being shared :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

stay unpredictable alok. and continue to inspire & motivate people.....!!!!

lovely.... 

A lesson learnt. Thanks for the post!

Super..

This one is really nice. The way your drafted the content is brilliant. Very catchy, Impressive, No essay writing :) 

Great, Keep us updated

Cheers

Govind  

All great changes are preceded by chaos...

It doesn’t matter what, who, when, where and how ...the result is a GREAT CHANGE !

It is my turn to say – keep parking ...

Thanks & regards

Samee

Awesome Samee....... You responded with lot of humility..... I hope that it stays with you in-spite of success or failure... As usual thanks for sharing Alok..... 

Alok,

This is my first reply ever on Rodinhoods and i'm not sure why i am so excited...

I am a sales person by profession and today i learnt something that is going to change the way i write emails to prospects and clients.

I completely agree with Samee's line "Being bred in the conventional style of writing, I would have never thought these lines, any time."

Thank you Alok...

my pleasure, my job, my karma

share, share, share, share, share

Alok... Its just waooooo....

I too sometimes reply to junk mails like this just to see if they reply back. They never do. :)

Keep Inspiring!!!

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